my own project - 7 sunsets

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can you warn before you post something that needs to download?
 

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I thought it was alright.

Stuff I liked:

The gist of the story and fair amount of the script. It had it's weak points, but there was a goal in mind and the story held up it's end of the bargain on that.

The editing and camera work seemed well done. The shots seemed to fit together and if the camera had been a higher dollar one, it would have looked pretty professional.

Direction, from what I can tell, seemed solid.

Stuff I didn't like:

The acting. Pretty much anyone outside of the prisoner and the reporter was terrible. The prisoner seemed really flat and didn't evoke the emotional response that I think the story was going for, but he didn't make me cringe at any point. The reporter was pretty up and down. He had moments where he seemed somewhat natural, but other moments where it definitely made me cringe. He also smokes cigarettes in a very strange manner.

The music felt like it was straight outta the 80s. :)

The reporter guy's talking to himself between the interviews seemed really forced. Maybe there's a better way to show what the reporter is thinking?

The voice-over at the end about the life lesson that the reporter had learned was waaaay over the top. He kind of had a Stuart Smalley staring into the mirror thing going.
 

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Heisenberg;4395232 said:
I thought it was alright.

Stuff I liked:

The gist of the story and fair amount of the script. It had it's weak points, but there was a goal in mind and the story held up it's end of the bargain on that.

The editing and camera work seemed well done. The shots seemed to fit together and if the camera had been a higher dollar one, it would have looked pretty professional.

Direction, from what I can tell, seemed solid.

Stuff I didn't like:

The acting. Pretty much anyone outside of the prisoner and the reporter was terrible. The prisoner seemed really flat and didn't evoke the emotional response that I think the story was going for, but he didn't make me cringe at any point. The reporter was pretty up and down. He had moments where he seemed somewhat natural, but other moments where it definitely made me cringe. He also smokes cigarettes in a very strange manner.

The music felt like it was straight outta the 80s. :)

The reporter guy's talking to himself between the interviews seemed really forced. Maybe there's a better way to show what the reporter is thinking?

The voice-over at the end about the life lesson that the reporter had learned was waaaay over the top. He kind of had a Stuart Smalley staring into the mirror thing going.

you're right. i had to do "this" to learn what you're saying and i'll do better next time because of this feedback so thank you.
 

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On a specific point I mentioned above about a better way to show what the reporter was thinking instead of having him just talk to himself. Maybe you could take the newspaper idea a bit further?

Like, how you have the prisoner reading the newspaper in between in the interviews. Maybe you could put the camera on the computer monitor and show a sentence or two of his story as he's typing it and make those sentences tell his feelings on the situation in a brief way?

I dunno. :) Just something I was thinkin' about.
 

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Hostile;4396584 said:
It didn't work for me at all.

what happens when you try? a simple avi file should just open and go so i'm surprised some are having issues, but let me know what you're seeing (or not) and i'll try to figure it out.
 

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iceberg;4396819 said:
what happens when you try? a simple avi file should just open and go so i'm surprised some are having issues, but let me know what you're seeing (or not) and i'll try to figure it out.
Maybe he meant he didn't like it. :laugh2:
 

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The heavy guy needs a different color of clothes and a haircut....other than that I liked it. :p: ;)
 

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BrAinPaiNt;4396901 said:
The heavy guy needs a different color of clothes and a haircut....other than that I liked it. :p: ;)

well i got the haircut now and seldom wear orange now. :) thanks, bp!
 

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CowboyMcCoy;4397083 said:
It doesn't work for me. I see a player, but nothing is playing. :(

you and 5 starts seems to have the same issue. do a right click/download and see if you can play it locally.
 

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iceberg...In your movie, how or where did you get those newspapers printed up to fit your movie.

:confused:
 

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5Stars;4398568 said:
iceberg...In your movie, how or where did you get those newspapers printed up to fit your movie.

:confused:

looked online and found a place that does "gag" newspapers. they give you "x" amount of space and you fill it and send them the file and they print it up for you.
 

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iceberg;4398630 said:
looked online and found a place that does "gag" newspapers. they give you "x" amount of space and you fill it and send them the file and they print it up for you.

Got it...

;)
 

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iceberg;4397130 said:
you and 5 starts seems to have the same issue. do a right click/download and see if you can play it locally.

I will try this soon. For now, I'm off to the gym and to see some live music at Ruda Maya... or I forget how to spell it. But I'm going to watch some music. I really want to see this. I love indie stuff.
 

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CowboyMcCoy;4398684 said:
I will try this soon. For now, I'm off to the gym and to see some live music at Ruda Maya... or I forget how to spell it. But I'm going to watch some music. I really want to see this. I love indie stuff.

really? go for it cause all i do on my own site is promote indie music.

been doing it for 12+ years.
 

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iceberg;4398735 said:
really? go for it cause all i do on my own site is promote indie music.

been doing it for 12+ years.

I know that. I'm a musician myself....

I think the issue is macbook. i'm on a macbook and I can't get it to work. BTW, we're going to see the Joe Crown Trio from Nola tonight. I hear they're good but have never heard them.
 
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